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This is my report on childhood obesity: Childhood obesity. By Lucy Coombes Imagine being trapped in an obese body, how would you feel in the state of being seriously overweight? Obesity has hit New Zealand children and we seriously need to do something about it.

Paragraph One: Did you know 1 in 4 children are obese? That’s a classroom of 32 children, meaning 8 of them will be obese. This serious matter is caused when children eat too much fatty food and don’t do enough exercise to work it off. According to s.p.a.r.c children need to do at least 1 hour of physical activity a day, unfortunately most don’t. If these children don’t start to loose weight now they will have some serious effects to their body later on in life such as types of heart conditions, diabetes and high cholesterol. In America they estimated that more than 300,000 Americans will die from heart conditions relating to obesity.

Paragraph Two: Obese children are more likely to be an only child and have obese parents. These parents set a bad example to their children. Obese parents are likely to eat large quantities of unhealthy food and do little exercise. This teaches the children to do the same.

Paragraph Three: There are solutions to this serious matter, such as cutting back on all the unhealthy foods, become involved in a team sport and enjoy it. Some primary schools are lucky enough to be involved in the s.p.a.r.c and project energize, they like to get children involved and help them enjoy exercise and sport. You can also eat healthy snacks such as, fresh fruit, and vegetables. And sit down at least once a day and eat a healthy balanced meal. If we stop this obesity now we are in for a brighter, healthier future.

So what would you rather be, obese and struggling or healthy and happy? Just remember, the children are our future.

Miss Crawford - A great report - the best I have read so far! You do need to beef up paragraph 2 more though, it's light on information. Also, could you insert a graph somewhere? Final:

Childhood obesity. By Lucy Coombes Imagine being trapped in an obese body, how would you feel in the state of being seriously overweight? Obesity has hit New Zealand children and we seriously need to do something about it.

Paragraph One: Did you know 1 in 4 children are obese? That’s a classroom of 32 children, meaning 8 of them will be obese. This serious matter is caused when children eat too much fatty food and don’t do enough exercise to work it off. According to s.p.a.r.c children need to do at least 1 hour of physical activity a day, unfortunately most don’t. If these children don’t start to loose weight now they will have some serious effects to their body later on in life such as types of heart conditions, diabetes and high cholesterol. In America they estimated that more than 300,000 Americans will die from heart conditions relating to obesity.

Paragraph Two: Obese children are more likely to be an only child and have obese parents. These parents set a bad example to their children. Obese parents are likely to eat large quantities of unhealthy food and do little exercise. This teaches the children to do the same. Many kids are spending less time exercising and more time in front of the TV, computer, or video-game console. And today's busy families have fewer free moments to prepare nutritious, home-cooked meals. So instead they choose to buy fast foods and takeaways. Now more than ever children spend more time playing with electronic devices, from computers to handheld video game systems, than actively playing outside. Television is a major culprit.

Paragraph Three: There are solutions to this serious matter, such as cutting back on all the unhealthy foods, become involved in a team sport and enjoy it. Some primary schools are lucky enough to be involved in the s.p.a.r.c and project energize, they like to get children involved and help them enjoy exercise and sport. You can also eat healthy snacks such as, fresh fruit, and vegetables. And sit down at least once a day and eat a healthy balanced meal. If we stop this obesity now we are in for a brighter, healthier future.

So what would you rather be, obese and struggling or healthy and happy? Just remember, the children are our future.